Sorry about the lack of a coherent blog today, but I’m just barely functioning. I actually wrote yesterday and I’ll include the stats today, but unless something major changes, I won’t be able to write today. For some reason, I don’t really feel all that well today. I’m not sure why, but I think it has something to do with getting over a minus sinus infection from yesterday. The weather has also changed from warm and sunny to cool and rainy and that is also affecting my sinuses.
Project Paradise Word Count: 357 (+244)
Project Skye Word Count: 1617 (+533)
Project Independence Word Count: 1723
Project Ship of Shadows Graphic Novel Page Count: 12
I hope to be back to writing and blogging as usual tomorrow. Have a good day!
Project Ship of Shadows Graphic Novel Page Count: 12
I came within 6 words of my Daily 250 word count, so I feel like this was a successful writing day. I would have liked to have gotten to 250 words, but the place where I stopped seemed like a natural “break” in the flow of the story.
Am I Submitting Drafts too Soon?
So, working on Project Skye has been an eye-opening experience. I’ve discovered some interesting things about my drafting process as a fiction writer. One of the things I’ve discovered is that I need to “Tell, Don’t Show” first. I need to tellmyself the story first before I try to show it to the audience. The second thing is that I may be submitting drafts one or maybe even two/three versions too early, and this may have to do with the terminology that I use when describing where I am in the writing process.
So, after I outline and write a Rough Draft (sometimes these are separate, sometimes not–although, lately, I’ve taken to outlining using the “Story Map” handout that I’ve mentioned before in a previous blog post, and then write the Rough Draft in the Notes App on my phone) which looks a lot like a “Treatment” for a Hollywood script. I let that sit for a week or more and then start on the next draft, the “Working” Draft.
To me, “Working” implies that it is a “Work-in-Progress” Draft of the story. It is, as close as I can make it, the story that I see in my mind. After the “Working” draft is finished, I compare it to the outline and the vision that I have in my head. If I’m satisfied with it, I’ll edit it and begin submitting. If I’m not, it will go through another “pass” to see if I can improve on it.
This process did not work with Project Skye. What I’ve done is created “Intermediate” drafts along the way with each successive draft getting closer and closer to the story/vision in my head. Unlike, 99% of my stories so far, I’m only on the first major scene, and already I think I’m going to need at least one more major pass at it to get it right. I’m doing a lot of world-building and characterization in this draft, but other techniques like building excitement by starting the story In Media Res (“in the middle of things”) and cutting of extraneous details that I need, but that the audience doesn’t won’t be addressed in this draft (although I have ideas on how I might accomplish these things in the next draft).
However, normally when I finished the draft that I’m on right now for Project Skye, it would go out to various markets, so I’m wondering, if I haven’t been simply submitting my stories too early in the process by not thinking of these drafts as “intermediary” steps to getting to a more “dramatic” story that does what all good writing should do: “show, don’t tell.”
Food for thought for me on this Wednesday afternoon. Happy writing and reading!
Project Independence Word Count: 1723 (+635 words)
So, this morning a watched a YouTube video (well, I actually watched several as I woke up earlier than normal–I went to be on time last night and now I feel refreshed, imagine that) that was on the channel Film Courage. While there are quite a few useful videos on the channel, this one caught my eye and I watched it. It was called Writing a Story: Three Things Every Great Story Has. I’m linking it below if you want to watch it for yourself, but I wanted to quickly touch on each of the three points in terms of my own writing.
A Great Hook
This is where I feel that I’m the strongest. All my stories, written and unwritten, have a great “hook” (in my mind at least). As a matter of fact, I think this is probably my strength as a writer (now, this is from an internal assessment–to know if this is true, I’d need people to read my writing and corroborate this) as I love coming up with ideas and new projects. I’m still working on my follow through–I could make it a full-time job of just coming up with new speculative ideas, if there was a living to be made from it, but alas, there isn’t. I have manilla folder after manilla folder of projects that I’d like to develop into short stories, graphic novels, screenplays, and novels (well over a hundred) and at least 5 or 6 notebooks filled front to back with ideas for even more projects, so this part (again, in my mind, not sure if it is true in reality) is something that I consider a strength.
If having a good hook is my strongest area, then I think creating strong characters would be my weakest area. I’ve mentioned in a previous blog that the reason for this, I believe, is that I’m a fairly reserved person. I don’t tend to joke around or be the social butterfly who is the life of the party. I’m an introvert through and through. Give me a choice between a loud raucous party and a nice quiet tree with shade and a good book and I’ll take reading under the shady tree every time. However, I’m learning to try to expand my characters. Just because I’m reserved doesn’t mean my characters have to be. I’m trying to expand my characters–Project Skye and Project Independence both feature (what I think are two no-nonsense female protagonists, although again, that’s my perception writing them), while Project Paradise features two characters who are polar opposites. I’m really working on trying to upgrade my characters and make them more emotive than they have been in previous stories.
Twists and Turns with a Surprise Ending
So this is one area that I’m not sure about–I thought I was doing well with this, but two editors that I submit to regularly, keep giving me contradictory feedback. Well, the feedback isn’t contradictory–it’s always negative. They keep finding “flaws” in the story. Why did X person do this? Why did Y thing work this way? Etcetera. Yet, it is always “nitpicky” things, you know, small things that could be fixed in editing/getting the story ready for “print” if you were going to publish it. For instance, here is a partial critique from a rejection “letter” for “Silence Will Fall“:
The story is well written and the alien conquerers of Earth are well conceived, and the necessary silence ads texture. However the alien weakness seems like something that should have been found and exploited when humanity still had all its resources. After such a long time it will be a long battle to get all the aliens to die at an electricity generating plant. It also defies belief that the hydro plant would get back into to operation so easily. When Eckhart talked (signed) to Victor, how did Victor see what he was saying if he had to half-turn after to look at him after? Sorry it didn’t quite work for me.
So, here I can’t tell what’s wrong with the story (at least, what’s wrong enough to keep it from going to print). These, to me, look like “nitpicking” rather than substantive story problems (in terms of “twists and turns”). The only one that seems substantive is the one that I bolded–“It also defies belief that the hydro plant . . .” as I had a longer, more fleshed out version of him getting the plant back online in an earlier draft, but condensed it for pacing (the one in the earlier draft was longer, slower, and other rejections noted it as a problem, so I changed it for the revision). The word also implies that the editor didn’t believe humanity wouldn’t have been able to stop the alien threat before it got so far out of hand. Yet, that’s exactly what happens in pretty much all of the “zombie apocalypse” stories out there right now (and quite a few “alien invasion” stories)–humanity is overwhelmed in the first few days, hours, weeks, and it is the survivors who have to deal with the threat (Independence Day, The Last of Us, and The Division are all media that I’ve watched or played that has this same set-up, not to mention the perennial powerhouse in the “room,” The Walking Dead), so is it me not understanding/doing something that these writers are understanding/doing or is it the editors just not wanting to publish the story and are nitpicking flaws to justify their decision? This is why I’m unsure if my twists and turns are a strength or weakness because there are examples (published) that I can point to that have similar set-ups/constructions, but I’m told via editorial feedback that my twists and turns have unpublishable flaws, I’m at a loss at who to believe.
Anyway, I found this YouTube video extremely helpful in helping me to think about my writing in terms of strengths and weaknesses and will continue to try to refine my strengths and raise the level of my weaknesses until they are strengths as well.
Today’s blog will be a short one on a few things that happened over the weekend pertaining to my writing life. These are mostly updates that I feel are important milestones, but each one isn’t really so important that it requires its own blog post. So, in no particular order, here we go:
Submitted All Tomorrow’s Children
So I submitted All Tomorrow’s Children (ATC) to its first market over the weekend. The market is a “major” market in the Science Fiction and Fantasy short fiction landscape, but I doubt they’ll accept it. While they say there never receive enough Sci-Fi (and ATC is Sci-Fi), their Acceptance rate is .09%. That means they reject 99.91% percent of the stories that are sent to them. Still, I had to try as they are one of the “new” big publishers of Sci-Fi/Fantasy stories. If the market doesn’t take ATC, I have two more publishers that I consider “big” to send it to and then I’ll step down a tier to the mid-level markets. You never know until you try.
“Blogging” My Way to 250 Words-a-Day
So, I have a confession to make. I have several Word Processors–Pages, SimpleNote (Mac App & Website), Scrivener, IAWriter App, and a couple of lesser Word Processors (and have access to Word through my school account and on their computers). However, I found over the past few weeks, that for fiction, I really just like the ease and simplicity of SimpleNote(which I’ve mentioned in the past), but also, just the WordPress Text Editor that I use to create my blog entries. While I used to draft in SimpleNote, I’ve now switched to the WordPress blog editor because I can quickly see the word count and when I reach my 250 limit for the day, I then copy and paste the work over to SN. One I have a completed draft, I then copy and paste that over to Scrivener and make my major edits there. Scrivener makes compiling a submission draft a breeze and that’s the draft I use to submit. It was this workflow that helped me to get All Tomorrow’s Children off my computer and out the door to a publisher.
Finished (FINALLY) the Rough Draft of “Project Skye”
I finished this over the weekend as well. It clocks in at about 4,000 words, but really needs some substantial TLC. This was an exploratory draft and written “by the seat of my pants” because 1) I wanted to get an idea of the character and 2) I thought I knew enough about the world in order to just write. The draft is a “poster child” for why I don’t write without outlining. There are plot threads that just drop out, there are character motivations that don’t work, there’s setting issues, there’s a storm that never develops, etc. This draft is an absolute “mess” and I will most likely have to rewrite the entire story from beginning to end rather than what I did with All Tomorrow’s Children which was “build” the story from the ground up. This illustrates the difference in my writing styles: ATC was fun to write for me, while Project Skye was an absolute slog. I can’t even show it to the Writing Center consultant to illustrate Skye’s character (which is the reason I wrote the story) because it really isn’t a “story” yet (at least, not in the way I think of “story”). But its done–that’s the best part. And what do they say? If you’re at the bottom, you can only go up from there–hopefully, by the summer, I can put together a draft that I feel proud to show off–because it isn’t there yet!
I’ve actually already written an Author’s Note on All Tomorrow’s Children, but I probably should have called it more of a “Rough Draft” Author’s Note because it really only discussed the inspiration of the story and some of the genre aspects of the story. Now that I’ve finished the Working Draft of the story and just need to edit and polish it before I start submitting it to various markets, I wanted to do a full and complete breakdown on just what the story is just as I did for Here Be Monsters and WarLight.
AUTHOR’S NOTE – ALL TOMORROW’S CHILDREN
So this title has been kicking around in my mind almost sense I joined the Chattanooga Public library way back in 1996. It was always around connected to a set of people using Psionics (mental powers–telepathy, telekinesis, etc.). The original conception was around a group of kids who, in the future, were dominated and controlled by a fascist state. They escaped and rebelled and fought agains the regime. It was supposed to be a graphic novel, but I could never get it to come together. A couple of years ago (my third year as a 6th grade teacher) a new idea came to me about a family of Psionics rather than a group of kids.
So, in the summer of last year, Sky News (British TV station) did a special report on JIHADI BRIDES and how many of them were lured into the camps of Jihadis based on elaborate promises made to them by these organizations. Yes, super controversial, I know, but this is when the idea for the story finally crystalized. What if one sister was lured into and recruited by jihadis for the cause of freeing Psionics from being discriminated vs the other sister who only came to lend her psychic talents to heal and make things better? This is where/when I began the story in earnest. It has undergone multiple revisions just to get to this point. I see it as violence vs non-violence (Malcolm X vs Dr. Martin Luther King Jr).
So this story isn’t very long and isn’t filled with a whole lot of details. Outside of the mental powers, there’s not even a lot of “sci-fi” going on. I wanted to keep it short and simple, but I may have made it too short and not enough sci-fi. On this final polishing pass, I may look for places where I can add in future technology to help distinguish as a sci-fi story, rather than a modern day story.
Time to Create
This took a long time to write–I’ve been working on it pretty in some form or another after I saw the video. I’ve working on it in-between working on my school work, working on grading papers and teaching, working on it while doing many other things. Also, I’ve had a really hard time writing it and a really hard time finding the TIME to write it. That is why Jesmyn’s Ward’s advice in Elizabeth Flock’s interview Read, Write, Improve was so timely for me because she said: “Persist. Read, write, and improve: tell your stories. Accept rejection until you find acceptance, but don’t become disheartened, stop writing, and remove yourself from the conversation.” I realized that I’ve simply become to wrapped up in the day-to-day world of living without giving myself space to write, so every day I try to carve out a small slice of time (even if it is only half an hour) to 1) read, 2) write, 3) edit (aka Read, Write, Improve). Sometimes I can’t do all three, but I try to at least do at least one of the 3 and all three, if at all possible. I generally wake up earlier now–and that’s what has allowed me to finally finish the Working Draft of this story.
So I’ve mentioned it before, I had an idea, but scrapped it and based the majority of the story, idea, and characters on the YouTube video by Sky New–Jihadi Brides. There are a couple other videos that Sky News did related to this subject that also informed this story, but by and large, much of impetus for the story comes from that YouTube video. I hope the story isn’t too derivative, but I tried to capture both the essence of the culture and the “lure” of fanaticism that I saw in the video, just in a world where mental powers exist. If you want to see the report, I’ve included a link below for context:
I originally had 4 main characters–Yeva, her sister, Javan (the husband), and a “Spiritual Leader,” of sorts, but I rolled the leader and husband into one for this draft to simplify things for me. I also originally had planned for Yeva and her sister to be twins with similar names (Yeva and Veya) as twins do, but it became too confusing for me to keep their names straight and if I, the author, couldn’t do it, I realized it would be difficult for readers to do so, so I changed the sister’s name to something more relatable.
I am almost finished with the Rough Draft of a short story for the “Project Skye” short story. I can see the home stretch/finish line with it. It is very “rough” as I jumped in without planning and boy, does it REALLY show! The story is all over the place. I estimate I’ll need AT LEAST two more drafts before it even resembles something which I would be proud to attach my name to on a submission copy.
Well, that’s all I have for now and thanks for reading this long Author’s Note! Have a great day!
So in the last blog post, I talked about planning a story for January. In this blog post, I’m going to talk about drafting (aka writing) a story. The story that I’m writing for January 2018 is Project Skye (the short story).
Short Story as Character Sketch
I’m writing this story as a way to examine Skye’s character. I was tasked to come up with a character sketch for Skye by the MTSU Writing Center as I struggled to try to create a novel this past semester. I struggled to do the character sketch because all my choices seemed arbitrary. So, I decided to write a story which puts Skye into jeopardy to see how she would react–to reveal her character through action.
Not as Easy as it Sounds
This sounds easy–I wrote a brief one sentence outline of everything that I wanted in the story. I wrote a beginning, middle, and end for the story. I wrote a 1 sentence brief outline of the scenes (3 scenes) in the beginning, middle, and end. I’m about halfway done, but I’m having problems working on it because 1) I now realize the setting actually needs to be changed (this is happening in their aircraft when it should be in “hovercars,” 2) this was to be a “prologue” event to show how they know each other (there needs to be a different prologue event and this needs to happen later in the novel’s timeline), and 3) The first section is waaaayyyy longer than I’d intended it to be (by about double–I feel like I need that length, but it is making the rest of the story unbalanced by comparison). Basically, I can see all the flaws that I want to go back and fix (i.e., start over). I’m going to try to trudge to the end, but when I’m not happy with the results of my writing, it is very difficult to finish.
Knowing When its “Right”
When HawkeMoon was “finished,” I knew that it was “right.” The same is true with Silence Will Fall (although I knew at the time that I’d written away from the ending I had in mind–so that’s why I had to rewrite the ending last year–to bring it more in line with the original ending that I’d dreamed about with that story). However, I’m not even finished with Project Skye and I know it isn’t right. I’m going to need at least one more draft to get it where I think it needs to be. That is the hardest part of drafting for me–having to keep going even when I know that the draft is lacking because I want to fix it immediately. I think, because I just dove into the project, without doing what I normally do (i.e., writing a draft that is just for me–my own personal “telling” myself the story, I don’t think that I have the action as firmly in place as I should).
As I go throughout this year, planning stories, the end goal needs to be: sometime during the last week of the month I need to write out a Rough Draft in which I “Tell, Don’t Show.” This draft is For My Eyes Only and will aid me when the time comes to turn my story into a draft for the audience where I then “Show, Don’t Tell.” If I don’t do a “Rough Draft,” then I’m going to have to spend even more time “fixing it” with another draft later on down the line.
So, I tried really hard really hard to write a Character Sketch for Skye that I could be really proud of, but no matter how hard I tried, I just couldn’t figure out a way to encompass all facets of her character–feelings, physical description, likes and dislikes. I finally resorted to something that I know and am familiar with (even though it earns me little to no money): a short story. Yep, I’m writing a short story in the world of Project Skye with Skye as the protagonist in order to nail down her character–how she looks, how she acts, how she responds under pressure. I do intend to market the story, but even if nothing comes of it, I’m hopeful that it won’t be for naught. The goal is to take what I’ve learned int the story and transfer it a novel length work–hopefully, the character work that I do with the story will translate into a deeper understanding of her character so that I can work with her on a longer, more intensive work.
Jonny Quest “movie idea” as Inspiration
A white back–late 90s, early 2000s–the character of Jonny Quest became hot again. He was a character created in the 1960s, who along with other Hanna Barbera, had a resurgence of popularity in the early/mid 80s and again in the mid/late 90s. A live action movie was mentioned in the trades (my library used to have a subscription to Variety, a movie trade magazine & remember seeing mention of in there, if memory serves), but it never came to pass. I remember thinking how cool it would be to write the movie adaptation of it, and as I’ve seen all the episodes, for both the original and the subsequent sequel series, I set about developing a “plot line” for the “movie.” I really liked the original title sequence and wanted to update that for my JQ “movie,” so I developed this elaborate flight intro sequence around Air Racing (yes, alert readers can see where I’m going with this). Well, the movie never happened, Hollywood (for now) has lost interest in most Hana Barbera projects (the two live action Scooby Doo movies are probably the best known movies that came from that collaboration) and even if it had, as an unknown writer with no written or produced feature length scripts, Hollywood wouldn’t have been beating down MY door for the idea anyway. I never used that flight sequence or even wrote it down–it has existed in brain all these years.
Fly Free Lester day I realized that I would never be able to write a traditional character sketch for Skye–that I was just beating my head against the wall. Instead, I turned my attention to what would happen if I put her in a stressful situation–maybe not the one I’d been working on for the novel, but another one. In fact, what would happen if I put Skye, instead of Jonny Quest, into the scenario I’d devised all those years ago for the “movie.” Well, I tried it and . . . it worked! I’ll have to check with my Writing Consultant, but Skye seems now like a living breathing person, a fully round three dimensional character who has wants, drives, needs, and feelings. She emotes, she feels, she does everything a good protagonist should do. Again, maybe I’m too close, but not only did I finish the first major “plot element” before I stopped writing, I was also able to outline all of the rest of the plot elements out to the “climax” of the story, which I left intentionally vague for myself (I have a feeling based on her character what’s going to happen, but I want the ending to feel “organic” and not overly plotted).
Still Committed to Project Star
Yes, I will be working on Project Star as well (where, o where will I find the time?), but I simply HAD to stop and draft Project Skies. It was necessary (IMO) to understand Skye’s character and without it, I don’t think that the novel would ever get off the ground.
So last week I began to create a tentative “Bible” for the world of the novel. It wasn’t much, I just put down on paper some of the ideas floating in my head and fairly hastily sketched out the ideas for the world that I needed to know such as the history, important people, and the important institutions of the world. Again, nothing major, but all of it is helping me to refine my process of thinking about the larger world and Skye’s relationship within it.
This week, while I finally have decided on how Skye should look, I still don’t have a clear handle on her personality, so the consultant and I decided I should write a scene with her in it. I know next week is going to be hectic for me so I actually wrote out the scene write after I the session. I’m not sure that it accomplishes my goal. It is an action scene, so it has Skye doing a lot of things and being clever, but she doesn’t really say a whole lot, nor does she really emote.
I think I’m going to have to try to find time to write a non-action scene that is heavy with dialogue as well to see what that looks like. I can’t seem to find the emotional resonance with her character. I’ll see what the response is next week, but I think the action scene doesn’t show enough of Skye’s emotions or feelings to really give an indication of who she is and how she acts in real life. I really need to know more about her personality and what makes her tick in order to do this story correctly.
EDIT: While search for a heading image for this blog post, I came across this interesting Infographic about 5 ways to write a scene. Considering that Infographics was one of the “genres” that I taught this semester, I thought it only appropriate to include one in my blog post–also, since I’m still having issues, maybe if I try writing a scene in each of the 5 “ways” that the graphic suggests, maybe by the end of the process, I’ll have a better understanding of Skye’s personality and who she is as character and person.